Francis Raven
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A House Divided
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Shotgun Shack
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All deletions OK
FR 1. Ok
FR 2. Double quotes OK “Deliberative democrats”
FR 3. Does this work better: “issuing in modification of his position.”
FR 4. Ok
FR 5. change as appropriate
FR 6. Ok
FR 7. Ok
FR 8. Ok
FR 9. “blacks in America”
FR 10. Because I am quoting my article in which I quote (for summary purposes) Levin's article.
FR 11. The numbering enters because I am now starting a list of factors affecting judgments of political talk. If the numbering begins too abruptly, you can add an introducing sentence: “Among the factors affecting our evaluation of speech, political speech, specifically, are the following:”
FR 12. Ok
FR 13. You're right that something is wrong here, but your change alters the meaning. How about substituting:
The difference between conveying one's meaning by direct or explicit assertion or by encouraged inference underlies the difference between misleading in an intentional communicative act and a bold lie.
FR 14. This was a section break, and I thought I was consistent about those. The previous numbering was for the list of factors. I understand the basis for the confusion, and, depending upon the journals style, you may want to insert an indentation or different fonts.
FR 15. Ok.
FR 16. And well you shouldn't be-it's a poor choice. Drop ‘contentful,’ and
replace it with the italicized:
toward those where the offense is less stark and more dependent upon details
of content.
FR 17. How about changing from
......that are skewed in racial, gender, or ethnic distributions
to
......whose racial, gender, or ethnic distributions are skewed
(Or:.....whose racial, gender, or ethnic distributions are skewed compared to the relevant population)
FR 18. Ok. The inner quote is Warren quoting Sunstein, so single quotes should be used.
FR 19. Yes: it is a quote from Warren.
FR 20. Please change as maintains consistency and journal style. My lapse.
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Francis Raven is a graduate student in philosophy at Temple University. His books include Shifting the Question More Complicated (Otoliths, 2007), Taste: Gastronomic Poems (Blazevox 2005) and the novel, Inverted Curvatures (Spuyten Duyvil, 2005).
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All deletions OK
FR 1. Ok
FR 2. Double quotes OK “Deliberative democrats”
FR 3. Does this work better: “issuing in modification of his position.”
FR 4. Ok
FR 5. change as appropriate
FR 6. Ok
FR 7. Ok
FR 8. Ok
FR 9. “blacks in America”
FR 10. Because I am quoting my article in which I quote (for summary purposes) Levin's article.
FR 11. The numbering enters because I am now starting a list of factors affecting judgments of political talk. If the numbering begins too abruptly, you can add an introducing sentence: “Among the factors affecting our evaluation of speech, political speech, specifically, are the following:”
FR 12. Ok
FR 13. You're right that something is wrong here, but your change alters the meaning. How about substituting:
The difference between conveying one's meaning by direct or explicit assertion or by encouraged inference underlies the difference between misleading in an intentional communicative act and a bold lie.
FR 14. This was a section break, and I thought I was consistent about those. The previous numbering was for the list of factors. I understand the basis for the confusion, and, depending upon the journals style, you may want to insert an indentation or different fonts.
FR 15. Ok.
FR 16. And well you shouldn't be-it's a poor choice. Drop ‘contentful,’ and
replace it with the italicized:
toward those where the offense is less stark and more dependent upon details
of content.
FR 17. How about changing from
......that are skewed in racial, gender, or ethnic distributions
to
......whose racial, gender, or ethnic distributions are skewed
(Or:.....whose racial, gender, or ethnic distributions are skewed compared to the relevant population)
FR 18. Ok. The inner quote is Warren quoting Sunstein, so single quotes should be used.
FR 19. Yes: it is a quote from Warren.
FR 20. Please change as maintains consistency and journal style. My lapse.
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return to sawbuck 3.1
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Francis Raven is a graduate student in philosophy at Temple University. His books include Shifting the Question More Complicated (Otoliths, 2007), Taste: Gastronomic Poems (Blazevox 2005) and the novel, Inverted Curvatures (Spuyten Duyvil, 2005).
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